I’m working through the first intimate scene for Cat and Alek (wasn’t my idea! They got there all by themselves!) and it’s, well it’s making me all teary ;p It’s so sweet! (and a tad raunchy ;p) I won’t deny that trying to get the words right without looking too bodice ripper or erotic might be tricky. But this is the first draft so I may go all out and work it out in the first re-write (and NO ONE will be privy to the first draft..). It’s nice when you start to get the hang of something you were worried about! Of course I still have to do it for the other characters too but all in time *grin*
Along with the post theme I learnt two important things today.
1. Sensei is both the singular and plural
2. Amazons should never have an apostrophe
So how did I learn that? Well someone responded to a thread I put on the UK Amazon asking for reviews with this.
M. Hepworth says:
Honest review of the free sample: basic grammatical errors put me off from taking a risk on a new author. (First two examples I met: incorrect use of apostrophes. The plural of Amazon doesn’t need an apostrophe, and the plural of Sensei is still Sensei). Sorry, you could be a genius at plot for all I know, but first impressions sell.
And that smarted. I didn’t know both those were mistakes (though as I go over the Amazon one in my mind it clicks more) and I responded with a not so great answer.. which I did amend later..
Nicole MacDonald says:
That’s okay it’s a fun read and not meant to be a literary masterpiece. Wouldn’t be your thing. But thanks for pointing those out. I’ll be sure to correct them.
The underline is the amended bit ; p
For the record – I DESPISE being nice to people who are intentionally being snarky. I guess it’s just me and my blogger mates (all you lovely peoples) who believe in manners.
Okay rant over… now off to fix those two mistakes and reload book *grin*
wow! you can reload if you discover mistakes?! Awesome.
And i WANT to see that first draft!!!!
*grin*
Well miss Kerrin… i blushed all the way through yours!! i have never read a *romance* genre book in my LIFE!!! whewwww…
ok the random sex scene yes (like in Book One of the Diana Gabaldon Series with the hunk of a red head, Jamie, and Claire…) fancy coming up with the idea that sex is always doggie style it had me cringing all the way through!! 🙂
Nicole: – Good luck with them… I HATE writing that stuff myself. I'm sure you will get the right mix. However i will probably still cringe (in a good way) at them anyway… 🙂
Pixie <– prudie 🙂
Have a nice night all
You do ever so well to respond with dignity and style! 🙂 Yay for you!
Big hugs! Take care
x
Well hey, at least something good came out of the snark.
o.o You are tempting me too much with update on scenes of the gals and their guys! (seriously, romance was my favorite part of the story!)
Hi,
Well, it would have helped if M. Hepworth had pointed out the fact the plural of Amazon is Amzonians not Amazons.
Example: Amazonians surrounded the camp-site, one of their number the tallest Amazon to set foot in our territory.
On the other hand, if referring to Amazon's output on sales of your book then it's OK to have an apostrophe.
As for Sensei, the Japanese never end words with S, so it's worth noting that little gem.
best
F
Hi Kerrin – yeah NO! ;p
Hi Pixie – well trust me I blush lots while writing it *grin* but it's still gonna be good 🙂
Hugs to you too Old Kitty! 🙂
This is very true B.E.T and I'm so glad you love the romance part! Especially as it took so long for me to admit to it *lol*
Hi Francine – well thanks! Those are very helpful gems which I am filing away 🙂
Just got Arrival on my Kindle. Looking forward to reading it. Delighted for you!
Yes, that must have stung – but some people just want to be right and don't care about being polite or considerate. AND criticising other people's work is quite likely the only writing they do. Unlike you – you've written a novel!!!!! Yippppeeeeeee!!!!
Anna May x
Anna:
supper good point. Probably right.
you can say 'criticisms without being a prick' its not hard to try and be nice about it. one sentance or one word can make the difference.
However, (not that i am defending him in the slightest) but some people don't mean to come across as a prick.
I do that myself sometimes. He may have thought he was being helpful 🙂
Nicole:
ah well like you said, chin up, and keep going. it is a FIRST book. If you can't make a mistake (or three) then it's a hard life. As for me, if i like the story, then a mistake is hardly noticeable.
anyway excuse my pre-coffee ramblings
talk later
Some people feel better about themselves when they are mean to other people – don't let it bother you! Snarky is…. you know.