I did it. I wrote the first intimate scene. And OMG is it hot! It’s also almost 3 pages long, so is going to require some creative chopping come the first re-write (*giggle* did that make any boys wince?). It is such a relief to have it done and be pleased with it and now I’m itching to zoom through the rest of the story. I’m just trying to keep all the twists and turns in my mind as I run through the plot on the ‘movie screen’ in my head. There are so many things that need to happen! Some are tiny, just suggestions, so to lay the foundation for book three and others are big important plot points that I have to reach. Ooo which reminds me.
If you have bought a copy of The Arrival ( and by the way, I LOVE YOU) and you do notice any errors like the gentleman in the other post mentioned, can you let me know? Either via this site or the comment form on www.thebirthrighttrilogy.com
I can’t begin to say how much I would appreciate this! After re-writing/editing/proofing as many times as I did I just know I’m skimming over some simple mistakes *rollseyes* and it’s very frustrating when people tell me they’ve noticed some but not what/where. Not that it’s a reader’s job to do this but seriously I would appreciate it heaps J Because then I can correct and re-upload it.
I also received another 5 star review today! This time from a 19yr old male and I have to say I loved it *grin* His enthusiasm for my book had me dancing, all the more so because a 19yr old male would probably be one of the last people I’d expect to enjoy it. I guess it’s small minded of me but I tend to assume that if it’s written by a woman with female leads then guys won’t be so inclined toward it. Finding out another guy really enjoyed it, just made my day *grin*. Here it is below – and excuse the spelling, as he himself says it’s not his forte (nor apparently mine *lol*).
5.0 out of 5 stars A surprise, February 8, 2011
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This review is from: The Arrival (BirthRight Trilogy) (Kindle Edition)
I was sceptical specially as I began the first few pages being a 19 year old male it seemed overly girly. I ended up finding the change of your usual male buff I got this character relieveing new and exciting. The voice of the author is what got the five stars for me it would of been a four star book otherwise but the author has an amasing voice that kept more of a movie playing in my head then merely reading a book. I will say I notice a few spelling errors 🙂 but i cant spell worth anything so I cant talk lol.
Also I at first found the 5 griffon guards dropping from the sky and four convenietly being single and attracted to them that might bother some people but if you think back that was what the spell they cast was for and so it didnt bother me when i thought about it.
*POSSIBLE SPOILER AHEAD* I was suprised and thought because of the amount of romance that you might have trouble writing the battle scenes I was terribly wrong the way you write those scenes are heart pounding you can feel the adreneline. The last chapter where jen shows up the way that you described her was amazing I truly got the creepy bitchs over all aura and got a beautiful image of a powerful and creepy foe. I loved that she was powerful yet calm that gave her a much more sinister feel very well done. I also enjoy that the girls seemed to use all of the abilities you werent left wondering well if they had that ability before why arent they using it now.*SPOILER END*
Also I love the new twist on old creatures such as the dragons I love that you describe the big ones as having no real need to breath fire and at most are usually interested in the livestock the change of them being for no reason destroying towns and killing everything was nice the change from there being one species of everything was also nice such as the many types of dragons it wasnt just like well thats a dragon n the only kind I loved that oo and the griffons being elephant sized THANK YOU! Finally I Absolutly Love the girls sence of humor through the whole book that was like an added spice also helped to make them much more real. To the author great job cant wait for the next one keep writing!
And then just cause it made me giggle
